your skin hangs off your bones
like streamers off the ceiling
like wilted flowers from their stems
your eyes are huge and grey
like smoky clouds dashed across the sky
like orbs of slate
(i saw your secrets written in them)
your lips are red
like the carmine center of fleshy cherries
like the rich scarlet of a heart
your fingers are fragile
like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky
(if you fly youre sure to fall)
you dance like a sunflower
bending and twisting
to face the sun
you love like a dew drop
clinging and holding
to my leafy fingers
(but you know youre not a flower)
you pray when no one is watching
because you dont want them
to catch your religion
you smile when no one sees
because you dont want them
to catch your weakness
(you arent hiding anything from me)
i love your skin
eyes
lips
fingers
i watch you dance
love
pray
smile
(and when you sleep i hope you see yourself)













Comments
The similes are very creative.
-claps-
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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
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Kyla: Poor Bambi...
Aerin: Do you think I like killing innocent creatures? And do you have any idea how long Ive tried to go without thinking of deer as Bambi?
Kyla: Holy crap. You like /Disney movies?/
-- Random Aerin and Kyla Conversation
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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
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Kyla: Poor Bambi...
Aerin: Do you think I like killing innocent creatures? And do you have any idea how long Ive tried to go without thinking of deer as Bambi?
Kyla: Holy crap. You like /Disney movies?/
-- Random Aerin and Kyla Conversation
the style changed three times. it represents a
beginning, middle, and end.
however, this part
your lips are red
like the carmine center of fleshy cherries
like the rich scarlet of a heart
your fingers are fragile
like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky
sort of mixes the beginning and middle styles.
i think this is a little confusing and irregular.
it seems to interrupt the flow in a less pleasant
style than before.
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It's supposed to be
your fingers are fragile
like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky
all together.
Is that better?
I just noticed that.
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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
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