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your skin hangs off your bones
like streamers off the ceiling
like wilted flowers from their stems

your eyes are huge and grey
like smoky clouds dashed across the sky
like orbs of slate

(i saw your secrets written in them)

your lips are red
like the carmine center of fleshy cherries
like the rich scarlet of a heart

your fingers are fragile
like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky

(if you fly you’re sure to fall)

you dance like a sunflower
bending and twisting
to face the sun

you love like a dew drop
clinging and holding
to my leafy fingers

(but you know you’re not a flower)

you pray when no one is watching
because you don’t want them
to catch your religion

you smile when no one sees
because you don’t want them
to catch your weakness

(you aren’t hiding anything from me)

i love your skin
eyes
lips
fingers

i watch you dance
love
pray
smile

(and when you sleep i hope you see yourself)

:iconmooney-bo-booney:

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:iconmjthinkpink:
I think that was beautifully poetic.
The similes are very creative.
-claps-
:iconmooney-bo-booney:
8D Thanks. I liked the bit about skin and streamers.

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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
:iconavalon-san:
Ooooh. :3 Is prettyyyy...me likes ittttt... x3

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Kyla: Poor Bambi...
Aerin: Do you think I like killing innocent creatures? And do you have any idea how long I’ve tried to go without thinking of deer as Bambi?
Kyla: Holy crap. You like /Disney movies?/
-- Random Aerin and Kyla Conversation
:iconmooney-bo-booney:
Tank 'ouuu! ^.^

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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
:iconavalon-san:
:3333

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Kyla: Poor Bambi...
Aerin: Do you think I like killing innocent creatures? And do you have any idea how long I’ve tried to go without thinking of deer as Bambi?
Kyla: Holy crap. You like /Disney movies?/
-- Random Aerin and Kyla Conversation
:iconstellarsupernova:
after seeing this a few times, i like how
the style changed three times. it represents a
beginning, middle, and end.
however, this part

your lips are red
like the carmine center of fleshy cherries
like the rich scarlet of a heart
your fingers are fragile

like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky


sort of mixes the beginning and middle styles.
i think this is a little confusing and irregular.
it seems to interrupt the flow in a less pleasant
style than before.


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blackholes&&revelations
:iconmooney-bo-booney:
Oops!

It's supposed to be

your fingers are fragile
like the friable soil from which life grows
like a tiny bird who knows nothing but the sky

all together.

Is that better?

I just noticed that.^^;

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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3
:iconstellarsupernova:
hahah yeah i thought that was how it should have been. =]

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blackholes&&revelations
:iconmooney-bo-booney:
Thanks for pointing it out. xD

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Look around your world, pretty baby, is it everything you hoped it be? <3

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